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Creekwalker Poetry Prize
5620 Paseo Del Norte #127-240
Carlsbad, CA 92008

Just for Once
by Diana Woodcock

Just for once
try being as fluid
as ice melting.
Cease bucking change.

Try believing
you have all you need
and your soul is immense.
Try simply seeing things

as they are,
watching without judging—
without fearing—
the cobra.

Try keeping as still
as the egret who stands
in perfect quiescence
among sacred lotus flowers,

and consider how the Atlas moth,
though its majestic wings stretch out
one foot in length, emerges to live
just one day.

Originally published in White Heron, 2003

Poetry - $500 Prize: Submit a group of five poems. 100 lines maximum per poem. No children's verse or light verse. Final Judge: Kathryn Stripling Byer, North Carolina State Poet Laureate

Short Fiction - $500 Prize: Any theme or genre (except children's). 4,000 words maximum. Final Judge: Shannon Ravenel, Co-founder of Algonquin Books (see interview)

Georgia Hale isn't at all like me. But when one attends the same college, lives in the same dorm, and shares only the responsibility of getting papers in on time, it's hard to see the difference. It is only here on her farm in Vermont that it is apparent.

Georgia believes in three things: family, God, and horses. But I think that if she had to choose between God and horses, God would have a long switchy tail. People say that one takes on the resemblance of those one loves most. Georgia Hale is horsey, then, with large strong teeth, and a ginger-colored mane of hair that falls straight down her muscled back. She is five-ten in her stocking feet and well-developed, but without a trace of softness.

"I'm of good stock," she says proudly.

When Georgia was twelve, her father Frank and her brother Case cut a hole in the ceiling over the tool room, built a wooden ladder, and made her a bedroom loft. The walls of the loft are sharply angled, so she and I can only dress in the center of the room or else we'll bump our heads. Georgia has pasted magazine cutouts of horses all around the room, and when she lies down on her bed she can see the stables from the room's only window.

Her side of the room is cluttered with riding pants, work blouses, stuffed Dakin animals, dirty underwear, and Dick Francis paperbacks. For college graduation, her mother bought her a new riding crop. It hangs on a wooden chair.

On my side, there is an old mattress, a blue handmade quilt, an open suitcase, and a copy of Madame Bovary, which was the only gift you ever bought me. There is also my journal, a convoluted mixture of notes, short narratives, and these letters to you that I dare not send. A sort of survey of my life. Something as an historian I know you will approve of...

Click to read the full story in the current issue of Perigee.

Artists Embassy International Poetry Contest - 43 Cash Awards
To further understanding and goodwill through the universal language of the arts
Postmark Deadline: May 15
43 Poetry Contest winners will be honored at the 15th Annual Dancing Poetry Festival on September 27, 2008. The authors will be invited to read at our prestigious podium in the elegant California Palace of the Legion of Honor Art Museum in San Francisco. Over $1,000 will be awarded, and all winners receive free entry into our festival plus a printed award certificate. The top three poems chosen as Grand Prizes will be choreographed, costumed and videotaped live in an on-stage performance at the Festival.

Recent topics of winning poems have touched on the travels of Matisse, a Picasso painting, falling leaves, love, Iraq, China, history, dance, current events, reverie, socially significant situations and even some humor sprinkled here and there. Please don't feel constrained to write a poem about dancing.

The entry fee is $5 per poem or $10 for 3 poems. Each poem may be up to 40 lines long. Send two copies of each poem. One copy should be anonymous (just title and poem), the other should have your name, address, phone, email address and where you heard about this contest (e.g. Winning Writers Newsletter).

When the judges evaluate entries, they look for innovative perspectives on ordinary or unusual subjects as well as excellence of craft. Your entry should be suitable for a general audience since our following is comprised of people of all ages and ethnicities. English translations must be included with non-English poems.

Our judges consist of poets, dancers, musicians and visual artists of various media, all members of Artists Embassy International. Judging is done with the anonymous copies of the poems. Artists Embassy International is a non-profit, volunteer, arts and education organization whose goal is to further intercultural understanding through the arts.

Three poets, the Grand Prize winners, will be rewarded with seeing their poems danced by Natica Angilly's Poetic Dance Theater Company, a well-known dance troupe that has performed around the world and throughout America. This company is dedicated exclusively to creating new avenues by combining poetry, dance and music together for presentation and the expansion of poetry with dance in the life of our culture.

To enter the contest, please visit our website at www.dancingpoetry.com or submit to our Dancing Poetry Chair, Judy Cheung, 704 Brigham Avenue, Santa Rosa, CA 95404. Questions? Please email Ms. Cheung at jhcheung@comcast.net.



The Short Long-Distance Writing Contest
Postmark/Electronic Submission Deadline: June 1
500 words. 2 time zones. Set in Canada.
First prize $250 • Second prize $150 • Third prize $100

Details: Send us a short story in which the action takes place in at least two time zones within Canada. 500 words maximum, fiction or non-fiction. Winners will be published in Geist magazine and at geist.com.

Geist is a quarterly magazine of ideas and culture, founded in 1990 and published in Vancouver, BC, with subscribers across Canada, south of the border and abroad. Winner of numerous National and Western Magazine awards, Geist offers the best in stories, dispatches, photography, comix, poetry, puzzles, weird cartography, little-known facts and offbeat literary contests. Can a magazine be smart, funny and Canadian? Yes—if it's Geist.

Entry Fee: $20 CAD for the first entry (includes a one-year subscription to Geist), $5 CAD for each additional entry. Anyone—no matter where you live!—is eligible to enter. Pay your fee via PayPal, which will handle any necessary currency conversion. (You don't have to have a PayPal account, just a credit card.)

For the complete contest guidelines, please visit www.geist.com/distance or call 888-434-7834 (888-GEIST-EH).

Enjoy this excerpt from "Balkan Farewell" by David Albahari, published on Geist...

In Zagreb, Croatia, I leave my friend's apartment and flag down a cab right in front of it. I have to catch a train, which will take me to Ljubljana, Slovenia. Only when I settle down in the back seat of the cab do I notice that on the dashboard there are several stickers with the letter U, the sign of Ustashe. During the Second World War, Ustashe was the ruling party in the Independent State of Croatia. They also had their own army and ran a number of concentration camps where many Serbs, gypsies and Jews were slaughtered. In the 1990s, during the breakup of Yugoslavia, their supporters reappeared and the old stories of their horrible crimes began circulating again. I look at the signs and try to disappear. It doesn't work. Instead, I try to make myself as small as possible, but the driver's eyes find me in his rear-view mirror. "Is everything ok?" he wants to know. "Are you comfortable back there?"...

Click to read the full story.

Guy Owen Prize Contest
Postmark Deadline: June 15
$1,000 and publication in Southern Poetry Review will be awarded to the poem selected by a distinguished poet. Send 3-5 previously unpublished poems (10 pages maximum). Include a self-addressed, stamped envelope (SASE) for reply only, and a check for $15 payable to Southern Poetry Review. We consider poems published online or posted there as previously published. Include all contact information on cover sheet only; do not include name or contact information on poems. Please indicate simultaneous submissions. All entries will be considered for publication. We cannot accept email submissions, nor can we accept them on disk. Manuscripts will not be returned. The entry fee includes a one-year subscription to the journal. Please mail your entry and fee to:

Southern Poetry Review
Guy Owen Prize
Department of Languages, Literature and Philosophy
Armstrong Atlantic State University
11935 Abercorn Street
Savannah, GA 31419-1997

Previous Winners
2007: Marianna Busching, "Ode to the Innards", selected by Linda Pastan
2006: R. T. Smith, "Plantation of the Mad", selected by Dave Smith
2005: Enid Shomer, "'Gowned Waiting'", selected by Fred Chappell
2004: Alison Jarvis, "Listen", selected by David Kirby
2003: Andrew Grace, "For Tityrus", selected by Ellen Bryant Voigt
2002: Debra A. Daniel, "Hymn of Invitation", selected by Peter Meinke

Click for the complete contest guidelines, and to read the 2002-2006 winning entries.

2008 Autumn House Poetry Prize and Autumn House Fiction Prize
Postmark Deadline: June 30
The winners will receive book publication, a $1,000 advance against royalties, and a $1,500 travel grant to participate in the 2009 Autumn House Master Authors Series in Pittsburgh. All finalists will be considered for publication. Final judge for the Poetry Prize is Naomi Shihab Nye. Final judge for the Fiction Prize is Sharon Dilworth (see interview).

All full-length collections of poetry 50-80 pages are eligible. Fiction submissions should be approximately 200-300 pages. All fiction sub-genres (short stories, short-shorts, novellas, or any combination of sub-genres) are eligible. Include a stamped, self-addressed envelope (SASE) for contest results. Autumn House Press assumes no responsibility for lost or damaged manuscripts. All entries must be clearly marked "Poetry Prize" or "Fiction Prize" on the outside envelope. $25 entry fee (check or money order) must be enclosed. Send manuscript and fee to:

Autumn House Press
P.O. Box 60100
Pittsburgh, PA 15211

Click for the complete guidelines. Please note: Manuscripts will not be returned.

The Litchfield Review Writing Contest
Postmark Deadline: June 30
We seek poetry, fiction and creative nonfiction for our semi-annual magazine competition. Prose entries should be 3,000 words or less. Poetry entries may be of any length.

To be considered for both publication and a cash prize, please enclose $10 with each essay, short story, or set of 1-3 poems. Enclose $15 and you may submit an unlimited number of entries. Mail your manuscripts to:

     The Litchfield Review
     7 Bonna Street
     Beacon Falls, CT 06403

For more information and news about our ongoing writing contests, please check our website, www.thelitchfieldreview.com, or email Theresa C. Vara at tvdannen@sbcglobal.net.

The Litchfield Review proudly congratulates Amy Nawrocki as the First Prize winner of The Litchfield Review Spring 2008 Writing Contest. Her poem "Annotating the Text" appears in the latest issue.



Now Open
Lunch Hour Stories 2008 Short Story Contest
Postmark Deadline: June 30
Lunch Hour Stories welcomes your unpublished short fiction for our 2008 contest. Stories should be literary in nature, 4,000-8,000 words in length, and formatted in common manuscript style.

Prizes: First Place: $150 and publication; Second Place: $100 and possible publication, Third Place: $50 and possible publication. Up to twelve (12) additional stories may be selected for publication. Each selected author will receive $50 and publication.

Genre Writers: Suspense, mystery, fantasy and sci-fi will be considered as long as the story only mildly leans toward the genre and can still appeal to a general audience. Nonfiction, children's, religious, romance and erotica will not be considered.

Send one printed copy along with a $10 reading fee per story (limit 3), contact information, a short synopsis, a short author bio, and a letter-sized SASE for list of winners to: Lunch Hour Stories, 2008 Short Story Contest, 22833 Bothell-Everett Hwy, Ste 110 - PMB 1117, Bothell, WA 98021, USA.

Reading fees may also be paid online at www.lunchhourstories.com/shop. We accept simultaneous submissions, but reading fees are non-refundable. Electronic submissions are accepted only if the author resides outside the United States. Send story as a WORD file attachment to: editor@lunchhourbooks.com. Winners will be notified by September 30. Winning stories are eligible for publication during the 2009 calendar year. NEW WRITERS are encouraged to enter!

Click for the complete guidelines at www.lunchhourstories.com. Thank you!



Annual Milton Dorfman Poetry Prize
Postmark Deadline: August 1
The Milton Dorfman Poetry Prize is sponsored by Rome Art & Community Center of Rome, New York. FIRST PRIZE $300, SECOND $150, THIRD $100, plus honorable mentions. Entries accepted from all over the US and the world. Judge to be announced. Entries must be original poetry, unpublished at time of submission. Guidelines must be followed or entry will be void. Entries must be typed on 8.5" x 11" paper. Author's name, address, and telephone number must appear on the BACK of each entry. Entry fee of $10 per poem, US funds. Checks or money orders accepted. Entries may also be submitted via email with a credit card payment over the phone—call 315-336-1040 for more info.

Contest open to the general public, excluding RACC employees. Winners will be notified by telephone. Winning entries will be published and read during the annual awards ceremony at RACC. More info can be found at www.romeart.org. Make your entry fees payable to Rome Art & Community Center and mail your entries to: Rome Art & Community Center, c/o Dorfman Poetry Prize, 308 West Bloomfield Street, Rome, NY 13440.



12th Annual Robert Frost Foundation Annual Poetry Award
Postmark/Email Submission Deadline: September 15
The Robert Frost Foundation welcomes poems in the spirit of Robert Frost for its 12th Annual Award. The winner will receive $1,000 and an invitation to present the winning poem at the Frost Festival located at the Lawrence Public Library in Lawrence, Massachusetts, on Saturday, October 25.

Please submit two copies of each poem, one copy with contact information and one copy free of all identifying information. Mailing address: Robert Frost Foundation, Lawrence Library - 3rd Floor, 51 Lawrence Street, Lawrence, MA 01841. Email submissions are also accepted at frostfoundation@comcast.net. Reading fees are $10 per poem (send fees via regular mail, please). Read about last year's honorees and the contest guidelines at www.frostfoundation.org. Please enjoy "Penumbra" by Robbie Gamble, a poem from the Frost Foundation's 2005 online anthology:

Penumbra
by Robbie Gamble

The moon slid into place as advertised
Across the sun, one summer afternoon.
I stepped outside to feel what charged the air,
Drawn to the change, the modulating light
That caused the birds to settle for the night.
I gazed up, the corona hanging there
Was streaming shadows, beams of light and gloom
That barred the earth, and held me hypnotized.

He once encouraged us to walk in light,
For those who walk in darkness mostly stumble.
But I feel pinned at this penumbral edge
Where light and dark both awe and draw a wedge
Between heart's home and craved constructs that crumble.
Slide on, eclipse—expose my appetites!

Now Open
2008 RRofihe Trophy
Postmark Deadline: September 15
For an unpublished short story (up to 5,000 words). Winner receives trophy, $500 cash and publication in Open City. Judged by Rick Rofihe, assisted by Carolyn Wilsey.

Guidelines:

• Stories should be typed, double-spaced, on 8 1/2" x 11" paper with the author’s name and contact information on the first page and name and story title on the upper right corner of the remaining pages
• Limit one submission per author
• Author must not have been previously published in Open City
• Mail submissions to RRofihe, 270 Lafayette Street, Suite 1412, New York, NY 10012
• Enclose a self-addressed stamped business envelope (SASE) to receive names of winner and honorable mentions
• All manuscripts are non-returnable and will be recycled
• Reading fee is $10. Check or money order payable to RRofihe
• See the complete guidelines at http://www.opencity.org/rrofihe.html

Rick Rofihe is the author of Father Must, a collection of short stories published by Farrar, Straus & Giroux. His fiction has appeared in The New Yorker, Grand Street, Open City, Swink, Unsaid, and on epiphanyzine.com. His nonfiction has appeared in The New York Times, The Village Voice, Spy, and The East Hampton Star, and on mrbellersneighborhood.com. A recipient of the Whiting Writers' Award, he has taught writing at Columbia University and the Writer's Voice of the West Side Y. He currently teaches privately and at Gotham Writers' Workshop in New York. He is the editor of the new online literary journal, anderbo.com.



Now Open
2008 Anderbo Poetry Prize
Postmark Deadline: November 1
For up to six unpublished poems. Winner receives $500 cash and publication on anderbo.com. Judged by Kim Waller.

Guidelines:

• Poems should be typed on 8 1/2" x 11" paper with the poet's name and contact information on the upper right corner of each poem
• Poet must not have been previously published on anderbo.com
• Mail submissions to 270 Lafayette Street, Suite 1412, New York, NY 10012
• Enclose a self-addressed stamped business envelope (SASE) to receive names of winner and honorable mentions
• All entries are non-returnable and will be recycled
• Reading fee is $10. Check or money order payable to RRofihe
• See the complete guidelines at http://www.anderbo.com/anderbo1/anderprize2008.html

Kim Waller's first published poems appeared in anthologies edited by Chad Walsh and John Ciardi. Her poetry has subsequently appeared in The Hudson Review, The Minnesota Review, New World Writing #10, Best Poems of 1975, The Penny Paper, Visiting Frost, and the Cider Mill Press, among others. Her privately-printed collection of poems is titled Winter Parsley. She is now a freelance magazine writer specializing in architecture and interior design. Her articles have appeared in such magazines as Coastal Living, House Beautiful, Connecticut, Real Simple, Travel & Leisure, The New York Times, Decorating, and Home. She is the author of two books on tea and three decorating books, and her personal essays have been in magazines and two anthologies: Thoughts of Home and The Quiet Center. She and her husband, a documentary filmmaker, live in New York City and have two sons.

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Closing Next Month
War Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: May 31
We seek 1-3 original, unpublished poems on the theme of war for our seventh annual contest, up to 500 lines in total. We will again award $5,000, including a top prize of $2,000. Submit online or by mail. The entry fee is $15. Judge: Jendi Reiter. See the complete guidelines and past winners.


Margaret Reid Poetry Contest for Traditional Verse
Postmark Deadline: June 30
Now in its fifth year, this contest seeks poetry in traditional verse forms such as sonnets and free verse. Both published and unpublished poems are welcome. Fourteen cash prizes totaling $5,250 will be awarded, including a top prize of $2,000. The entry fee is $6 for every 25 lines you submit. Submit online or by mail. Early submission encouraged. This contest is sponsored by Tom Howard Books and assisted by Winning Writers. Judges: John H. Reid and Dee C. Konrad. See the complete guidelines and past winners.


Tom Howard/John H. Reid Poetry Contest
Postmark Deadline: September 30
Now in its sixth year, this contest seeks poems in any style, theme or genre. Both published and unpublished poems are welcome. Fourteen cash prizes totaling $5,250 will be awarded, including a top prize of $2,000. The entry fee is $6 for every 25 lines you submit. Submit online or by mail. Early submission encouraged. This contest is sponsored by Tom Howard Books and assisted by Winning Writers. Judges: John H. Reid and Dee C. Konrad. See the complete guidelines and past winners.


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PUBLIC SERVICE ANNOUNCEMENT

Using Comics to Motivate Readers—Free Comic Book Day
May 3, 2008

The definition of literacy used in the 2003 National Assessment of Adult Literacy focuses on using printed and written information. In today’s world, however, people access information in many more ways—computers and video screens, podcasts, and photos and pictures. And under the theory of “multiple intelligences”, people have different learning styles—some auditory, some kinesthetic, others visual.

Comic books have been used as educational tools since the 1930s, especially with pre-teen and teenaged boys. Now there’s a growing number of advocates for using comics and graphic novels—book-length comics—to engage and motivate adults learning basic literacy and English as a second language.

A study by the University at Buffalo found the average American comic book reader is 25 years old. “Comics spark interest and encourage reading and can be a powerful tool for reaching visual learners.”(1) Another case study states: “readers credit comic books with providing them with the linguistic basis for reading more difficult text.”(2)

Adult literacy practitioners who haven’t thought of using comics and graphic novels might consider doing so on May 3rd. Declared Free Comic Book Day, thousands of comic book retailers around the world will give out free comic books that day.

ProLiteracy affiliate Cape Fear Literacy Council partnered with a local comic book store for an event held on last year’s Free Comic Book Day. Council representatives staffed an information table at the store and received more than $500 from a raffle the store conducted. “It was one of the least intensive fundraisers we’ve ever done,” said Yasmin Tomkinson. “And we raised awareness and money in a new venue.” Tomkinson said the Council was so happy with the results that staffers are working on another event with the store for this year.

How can comic books and graphic novels help adult literacy and ESL students? Freelance writer Steven Grant found that comic books, “are useful for introducing concepts such as narrative structure and character development...they appear to enhance the development of analytical skills and critical thought.”(3)

In his book Literacy in the New Media Age, Gunther Kress says limiting adult learners to read print text only does them a disservice in today’s “communication revolution”. And author Jon Sieszka (The Stinky Cheese Man) says educators need to expand the definition of reading to include graphic novels, comic books, magazines, and audio books.(4)

Go to Free Comic Book Day to learn more about the May 3rd event. If you would like to partner with a comic book retailer on an event, go to the store locator to find a store near you.

Notes

1. Michael R. Lavin, Comic Books and Reading, UBlib/Buffalo.edu
2. Mathabane, M. (1986). Kaffir boy. New York: Plume
3. Steven Grant, Pow! Using Comic Books to Get Kids Reading, Disney Family Parenting
4. Valerie Strauss, Washington Post, (3-24-08) Author Works to Prevent Reading’s 'Death Spiral'

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JENDI'S CRITIQUE CORNER

This month, Critique Corner is pleased to present "The Mirror" by Neville Klaric.

If you would like a chance to be critiqued, please email your poem to me at critique@winningwriters.com. Send the poem in the body of your email message (no attachments) and put "poetry critique" in the subject line. One submission per poet per month. Thanks!


The Mirror
by Neville Klaric

Look into a mirror what do you see
Do you see gazelles pronking up and down like snow flakes falling to the ground
Or do you see the ocean dark and blue
Do you see me on a crystal wave floating out to sea
Or does the tide roll your heart along the ocean floor
My tears for you will never lie
Even though your eyes could never see the tears you had inside for me
You told me life was a balancing game and that we hold the balance
You rode your stallion in the rain
You rode him all through the night
You rode him never letting go for that stallion loved you so
Do you see the meadow in the morning sun
Golden leaves lying on the ground parting left and right like waves rolling out to sea
A faded shadow in a gilded frame trotting faster than before
Towards the scent he knows so well
The reins that hold him tight are now in his sight
Her hand lifting into the air
Golden honey dripping on her finger tips
Dancing drops of golden rain so sweet surround his tongue again
This the angels from above only give for two to share
For love and trust are just skin deep this moment for mortals not to keep
Black stallion's mane waving in the breeze balancing on his knees
Her hand once by her side striking at the fore
Spooked forever more
Galloping into the night
Following shadows cast by stars above forever now in search of love
Never to return again
But you'll hear him in the wind and taste him in the rain
And in the dark of every night you'll see the stars that are his tears
For he will love you for a thousand years

Copyright 2008 by Neville Klaric


Critique by Jendi Reiter

This month's critique poem, Neville Klaric's "The Mirror", uses a free-flowing modern verse form to freshen its traditional romantic sentiments and imagery. Energetic as the dream-stallion who embodies the passion of the protagonists, the poem's momentum is driven by internal rhymes and the syncopation of longer and shorter lines. However, inconsistent use of pronouns caused the occasional stumble for this reader, as the poem appears to shift from an "I/You" to a "He/She" perspective without making it clear whether these are the same characters.

The unrequited love of the original speaker is enigmatically interwoven with another story of a woman and a creature who appears to be a stallion, but actually represents Romantic Love itself—fleeting, ecstatic, wounded yet made sublime by loss. ("For love and trust are just skin deep this moment for mortals not to keep.") The beloved must disappear as a mortal individual in order to be transfigured into an immortal ideal, as described in the last four lines of the poem.

This understanding of romance harks back to the medieval tradition of courtly love, in which unconsummated passion for an unattainable Lady was sublimated into artistic expressions of devotion. This state of refined frustration was considered nobler than an ordinary coupling between two individuals....

critique continues here

This poem, our critique and contest suggestions for poems in this style appear in full at:
http://www.winningwriters.com/resources/critiques/2008/urc_0804klaric.php

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